Hey Anna and Alex,
My piece of the group essay is pretty much done, Ive just got some pieces that I need to work on.
My opening sentence is: "Cecily Cardew and Algernon Moncrieff's childish love is by far the most immature relationship in Oscar Wildes' play." I suppose this sentence works because our thesis is all about the exagerated styles of Oscar Wildes' character's relationships.
The transition ties the opening sentence to my first CD. My transition says something like "The foolish romance between the two lovers evolves around an assumption concerning Algernon's identity." My concrete detail introduces the concept of the Ernest misunderstanding. My commentaries explain the whole thing; the diary, the letters, Algernons bunburying, etc.
My next transition introduces the ideas of Algernons and Cecily's love. My CD in this part is how basically Cecily wants to be loved, and Algernon wants to love someone, making them an odd but compatible pair. My CMs in this part of the paragraph include two quotes (one describing each persons views on love).
The third part of the paragraph is the part that I have DEFINATELY had the most trouble with... I'm really not sure what to do still. If you guys have any ideas it would be great. Right now I'm deciding between bringing in the whole concept of how their relationship is exagerated and unlogical compared to the "normal" relatinships of the Victorian Era, and talking about another trait that makes them childish (like Anna suggested the other day). For example, the impatience of Cecily and how she could hardly wait for someone for 5 minutes, let alone until she was 35.
The conclusion sentance is pretty important and also a bit challenging because I have to introduce our conclusion, which we really haven't even started working on yet. And, also because I'm not sure how I'm going to end my paragraph yet. I'll be be sure to make it ties into both the thesis and the concluding part of my paragraph.
Thanks so much for your help, guys :). Have a great Mid-Winter Break!
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When you say: "The foolish romance between the two lovers evolves around an assumption concerning Algernon's identity." I think you meant revolves around. not evolves, also I don't think your commentaries are supposed to explain the facts anymore (like the diary, the letters.. etc), but your supposed to write like your own thoughts and feelings. Like I would write for that one, "Even though the name Ernest was misplaced and misused often, it shows the true pun in the contradiction of it." something like that.
ReplyDeleteUhmm another suggestion for the third point is the whole thing about their engagement, that Cecily arranged, wrote letters for herself about it, broke off, and eventually resolved (by herself).
Also, for the concluding sentence, just write whatever you think is good. We'll work the conclusion around your last sentence. It'll work out.
Otherwise, Good job! You too!
I think you have a really great start!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Anna about how the CM should express your ideas and not restate facts.
Also, you could write about how Cecily makes up an engagement in her diary.
Good Job!
Ok thanks for the advice!
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